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Commission: Raziel by Jammerlee

Hello friend, its your friendly best buy guy :D

As your comment says you got anatomy correct, however there seems ot be troubles with perspectives.
mainly the left foot (the one facing us) is abit off in perspective, its like hes on his tipsy toe or holding it in the air. The pendant seems to be going on its own perspectives (pendant is all like "Screw you lines! I'm going this way!" ). However the rest of the parts a bit fine, and it just needs practice.

ON a side note the ax is well colored but still looks 2-d. Even though textures attempt to make up for that (good textures at that) it does not make it 3d.

I do not mean to sound like "I"LL POINT EVERY FLAW IN THIS PIC" I point these out to try to further improve in those areas.

A few suggestions is try to sketch up some axes in a 3d settings from all perspectives, keeping aware of the vanishing lines and envisioning a 3-d model of said ax

The ratings are based on the faq. It is a commission so its not going to get high ratings int he originality or impact. However Techniques a little low because not 100% unique to you and the perspective issues, however I believe your on your way. However in vision I rate you well because you got it across what type of character he is.

(I hope this helps)

Your very much on your way to be a great artist just keep pushing. ^^
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Jammerlee Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
*nodnod* The lineart is actually very old and is from last year, so the things you've pointed out I've actually come to be aware of through working on trying to improve on anatomy and perspectives. That's part of why I chose to finish this particular commission first, to get it out of the way and move onto newer work. Though I'm finding I'm still having a lot of difficulty when it comes to drawing bladed weapons XD;; One of my most recent sketches has a sword in it.. hoo boy.

Thank you very much for your critique though ^^ It's always nice to have an extra set of eyes helping out *HUG*
bluedragon012 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome! Hopefully we get to see more of that art work from down the line! :D

Also your welcome, I will be vigilant, but poke me with a pointy stick if I'm a bit too vigilant. :D
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